Re: AaRLs Dialogues: Aug 25, 2013 - NEW Dialogue - Widow
Word doesn't separate them either.
I was referring to the "missing sentence ending" - I can't implement word order checks because, well, I don't know how to get my checker to fully comprehend English.
And checked v1.1.
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Line 108: resistance:"[FACE_FUCK_STYLE][HAPPY_MOOD][ARMS_HIS_LEGS][HOLD]S--[COUGH][ADD_TEARS]sorry! [LOOK_UP][BLINK]A girl's got to still breathe, you know?"
I meant "A girl still has got to breathe", but that's my fault for not providing a fixed version.
Line 150: first_throat:"[SHOCK][FACE_FUCK_STYLE][HAPPY_MOOD][ARMS_HIS_LEGS][HOLD]W--[SWALLOW]well. [LOOK_UP][BLINK]Glad to see your enjoying yourself... ББББББББББI wouldn't have it any other way."
"Glad to see your enjoying yourself" -> "Glad to see you're enjoying yourself"
Line 215: cum_on_face:"[CLOSE_EYES][NORMAL_STYLE][HAPPY_MOOD][ARMS_HIS_LEGS]Mmm... [RELEASE]ББББББББББto tell you the truth. I'd much rather it in my mouth next time. [OPEN_EYES][LOOK_UP]It's been quite a while since I last tasted you."
"I'd much rather it in my mouth" -> EITHER "I'd much rather have it in my mouth" OR "I'd much rather get it in my mouth"
Line 246: cum_in_throat:"[NORMAL_STYLE][HAPPY_MOOD][ARMS_HIS_LEGS][RELEASE]Mmm... ББББББББББ[LOOK_UP][BLINK]next time I want to taste it on my tongue... ББББББББББ[LOOK_UP][BLINK]and look into your eyes I swallow you."
"look into your eyes I swallow you" -> "look into your eyes as I swallow you"
Line 258: finish1:"[NORMAL_STYLE][HAPPY_MOOD][ARMS_LEGS][RELEASE]Well... ББББББББББ[LOOK_UP][BLINK]I'll say [SHOCK]THAT was defiantly worth it! Though... ББББББББББ[NORMAL_MOOD][LOOK_DOWN][BLINK]you think maybe now I should go pay my respects?[fin1]"
COPY... PASTE
Oh I love them like this.
When spellcheckers can't find the mistake because things are technically correct, but in any other way...
I'll save you the lengthy explanation of why this one is wrong, though.
"I'll say [SHOCK]THAT was defiantly worth it!" -> "I'll say [SHOCK]THAT was definitely worth it!"
Line 269: fo1:"Yeah... ББББББББББmaybe it is time to go. You know, to keep up this 'front' that I'll actually miss him. ББББББББББThought, at least this ending now will be better... no?[fo2]"{"style":"Him"}
Good fix on the rewording of "put up the front".
Oh and uh
Typo. "Thought, at least" -> EITHER "Though, at least" OR "Although, at least"
Line 276: fo6:"Mmm... ББББББББББall I cant think about now... [CLENCH_TEETH]ББББББББББis his seed following in me... [LOOK_UP][BLINK][CLENCH_TEETH]ББББББББББI want to have [SHOCK]HIS baby...ББББББББББ[fo5]"{"style":"Thought"}
Line 277: fo6:"Mmm... ББББББББББall I cant think about now... [CLENCH_TEETH]ББББББББББis his seed following in me... [LOOK_UP][BLINK][CLENCH_TEETH]ББББББББББI want to have [SHOCK]HIS baby...ББББББББББ[fo6]"{"style":"Thought"}
Here's your sentence:
"Mmm... all I cant think about now... is his seed following in me... I want to have HIS baby..."
"all I cant think about" -> "all I can think about", "his seed following in me" -> "his seed flowing in me"
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I didn't read the whole dialogue though - all I did was throw v1.0 and v1.1 into http://www.textdiff.com/, then look at the colored bits.
