A little late to the review party here, but I have to say, your version is much better than mine. My version was written during a time when I was still learning dialogue writing, so I may or may not update it, but that's besides the point. Good job!
This site uses cookies to help personalise content, tailor your experience and to keep you logged in if you register.
By continuing to use this site, you are consenting to our use of cookies.